Old Story Beginning:
Freema would be lying if she said that she hadn’t noticed the fact that Jamie was absolutely gorgeous long before anything happened.
New Story Beginning:
“Please go ahead and screw his brains out, just don’t go falling in love with each other.”
The entire first 750 words had to be cut out or cut up and moved about. Editing is hard but I think the new version is an improvement.
Bamber’s expression was an apology, “You are going to frighten off our friends” he told his wife. “Freema and James didn’t sign up for a latchkey party; this isn’t the 60s.
Back to actually writing Law and Order UK lies that I started before the show even started airing.
Hands still remaining at the base of her bra, he bends his head down and runs his tongue across one of her nipples through the thin lace.
I am now at a thousand words of mostly porn RPF. When I said ficlet, I may have lied to myself and to you.